First Attempt at Hindi!!!!!!!

Not particularly proud of it…. but its my first attempt at writing Hindi….Feedback pls….

Ankhon me jo chehra tha
Aaj jaane kahan kho gaya
Shayad yahin kahin hoga
Kya tumne use dekha

uske Ankhon me ek chamak thi,
Muskurahat me koi jadu tha,
Aur uski ek nazar,
Meri zindagi ka har gham bhoola deti

Aaj achanak ankhen mundi maine
Who muskan, who nazar,
Jaane kahan thi
Wahan the to sirf tum

Aur main tumse poch rahi thi
Kya tumne us chehre ko kahin dekha hai?

3 comments for “First Attempt at Hindi!!!!!!!

  1. shef
    August 10, 2006 at 8:27 am

    oye hoi..not bad woman!! good goin…love ya!
    shef.

  2. October 5, 2008 at 9:14 am

    Nice One, And great one if its first attempt…

    I also write hindi poems..

  3. October 6, 2008 at 5:33 pm

    Great attempt ! Unbelievable, it is the first one! Excellent. Keep writing.

    Anshu

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